Your advice on whether/how to improve this stanza is more than welcome. I suspect it’s one of the weakest.
1.1.4
‘My hat!’ At once, Rodion clutches
His topper (old, of German make). The toque that totters atop his hair.*
The drunk’s passed, but his jibe still touches
A nerve: ‘An amateur’s mistake! A nerve. It sparks an awful scare:
This brimless, tall, lopsided chimney-
pipe’s a clue! — It could condemn me!
Some sot would spot it, miles away,
Would notice as I passed… that day…
Would notice… Talk… Give testimony — !
It’s always small things men forget
That bring their ruin and regret…
Just so…. This hat could have undone me!
… I’ll wear some cap, some… “average” hat
The day that I go through with… that.’
Today in Damaging the Brand
Oh, Hugh Hefner’s son, don’t you know that because of who your father is, you represent everything he worked so hard to achieve: a world where men and women could finally just get it on and get along, without all those hangups? You can’t go doing violence to women, especially when those women are former Playmates of the Year.